I’m taking an English class, Eng 111, online. This is the last class required for my Associates. I’m going to get this puppy.

Anyway, one of the first assignments we have is two write two ugly sentences and correct them. We can’t write in the first person, can’t use helping verbs, etc. Simple, right? not so much… Here are some sample corrected sentences:

• For the excitement of being on top of the world, one writes for the rush. Now, if ones’ troubled with having no basic skills, one finds working hard with determination, the job gets done.
• Whom chooses the career of a play writer, hard work with determination looking into the future carries the path to lifes long dreams.
• Estonishment set in over what occured.

I’ll stop there. We are supposed to post criticisms to these sentences (as well as the essays). I’m not sure where to begin with some of them.

Bleah.

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